Fallen Star (A Poem)

Fallen StarHe should’ve been a star.
Presiding over a courtroom with
velvet steel fist.
Copy of  The Common Law his Bible.

Family first.
Children with his steel wool hair,
Generous smile,
Jumping in autumn leaves
While he shakes his head, bemused.

He was born too soon.
Before they opened the gates at Bellvue,
letting the bats out of the belfry.
Country bumpkin doctors prescribed
Howling meds.
Before balances were invented
to check his madness.

Whispers of “We didn’t know.”
Does little to return his youth.
Sits on porches,
Teeth in a jar beside him.
Listening to the wind blowing,
Trying not to hear their words.


Hi, welcome to Day 3, of OctPoWriMo. Today’s prompt was sweetness, and I’m sure you can see I totally deviated from it. I had another story to tell today.

http://www.octpowrimo.com/2014/10/octpowrimo-day-3-its-friday-sweet_3.html

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14 Responses to Fallen Star (A Poem)

  1. Beautifully and evocatively expressed. I felt a great lump of sorrow rise in my chest. I have a brother with schizophrenia and felt a deep sense of connection.

  2. Great job of portraying the sadness of if only and what he could have been.

    I too absolutely love your pic with the wings! I would love to have a similar pic of myself!
    Morgan Dragonwillow (@MDragonwillow) recently posted..Writing and Your Higher PowerMy Profile

  3. I especially enjoy these four lines . . .
    Sits on porches,
    Teeth in a jar beside him.
    Listening to the wind blowing,
    Trying not to hear their words.

    The last is my favourite.

  4. There are so many stories like this one – too many. At least he’s a star in your reality! <3
    Shan Jeniah Burton recently posted..OctPoWriMo Day 4: Two People at a TimeMy Profile

  5. Awww, the story of “What could have been.” I enjoyed reading this. I love the title, “Fallen Star.” It just sums up the story.
    Lita recently posted..OctPoWriMo Day Four – The Power of OneMy Profile

    • Tamara Woods

      Those “should have, would have, could haves” are some of the most painful stories. Thanks Lita.

  6. Wow. What an amazing, and heartbreaking story. You certainly did it justice.
    Laura A. Lord recently posted..Fear for the SonMy Profile

  7. Liked this tale !

    PS : I love your display pic ! You make a lovely angel ..
    Nimue recently posted..WeekendMy Profile

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